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  • The Steller’s Jay-V–\”The Root Stone\”

    It’s all clear, Penny typed into Daniel’s phone. He believed her, but scanned the edge of the woods himself just to be certain. The monstrous deer or The Cull as Folwor had called them, couldn’t be seen anywhere. It…

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  • Odd Sounds.

    I rolled over; my throat burned with the sting of vomit.

     “God damn.”

    I said out loud throwing up in a small bucket next to my couch.  I put my hand on my forehead.

     “Burning up.”

    I said…

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    • You are a truly captivating writer!
      Suggestion would be when you have dialogue include the “I said”/ “she replied”, ect directly after the quotation instead of on a separate line. It would make it flow smoother I think. And one minor typo: “you’re welcome” instead of “your welcome.”

      Keep up the good work!

  • It’s all clear, Penny typed into Daniel’s phone. He believed her, but scanned the edge of the woods himself just to be certain. The monstrous deer or The Cull as Folwor had called them, couldn’t be seen anywhere. It looked as if The Cull had thought he, Folwor and Penny had tried to cut straight across the meadow to the forest on the other side.…Read More

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  • The Steller’s Jay –IV– “The Past”

    Daniel’s arm felt numb as he woke up. He sat up, feeling the stiffness in his back and arms as he stretched. He must have dozed off at some point and fallen asleep on his arm, cutting off the…

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  • Autumn Leaves.

    I sat outside on my front porch waiting, for what? I still don’t know. Something tells me I never will. I recall that the world felt both warm, yet malevolent as the sky turned a blood red, and the…

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    • Hi Dominick! What an engaging and frightening story! I especially liked your way with words in the opening paragraph.
      One minor spelling error is ‘seemed’ instead of ‘seamed’. I’d also read your story out loud and make a few sentence structure changes so it flows even better. One example is the end of paragraph 4. Here’s one suggestion on how you could rephrase it: “It seemed to have the figure of a woman. Its clothes and skin were as pale as a ghost and it seemed to glide through the air; hiding just out of view.”

      Great job and I look forward to more!

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