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  • June 25, 2019

You are a truly captivating writer! Suggestion would be when you have dialogue include the "I said"/ "she replied", ect directly after the quotation instead of on a separate line. It would make it flow smoother I think. And one minor typo: "you're welcome" instead of "your...

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  • June 24, 2019

I just want to give Flo a hug! Here's hoping a new and happier chapter of life is unfolding. Look forward to more.

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  • June 21, 2019

Thank you so much!

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  • June 18, 2019

Hi Dominick! What an engaging and frightening story! I especially liked your way with words in the opening paragraph. One minor spelling error is 'seemed' instead of 'seamed'. I'd also read your story out loud and make a few sentence structure changes so it flows even better. One...

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  • June 11, 2019

Hi Jacquline, I'm a new writer here. This story gripped my heart. As someone who has struggled with depression in the past, you conveyed the feeling well. Look forward to more from you!

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